Here is a recent question that appeared in IELTS Writing Exam. In this article we will provide you the model answer to the question along with the important vocabulary and phrases in the passage.
The question as quoted in the Writing Section II in the IELTS Writing Exam
"The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend."
Analysing the question we see that it is about the rise in the number of children who are more than the normal weight of that they should be. The question clearly mentions that we need to mention what are the causes of this phenomenon i.e. what is the reason behind this occurrence and mention the effects i.e. how this has impacted the people involved and the society in general.
Below is the model answer given by one of our trainers. We would recommend you to write down your own answer to the question and then go ahead to read the model answer. This will help you better understand where you might be going wrong.
The model band-7 answer given by our mentor Robinson is:
"Over the last ten years, western societies have seen close to a 20% rise in the number of children who are overweight. This essay will discuss some reasons why this has occurred and examine the consequences of this worrying trend.
The main cause of this problem is poor diet. Over the last decade there has been a prolific increase in the number of fast food restaurants. For example, on nearly every high street there is a MacDonald’s, Kentucky Fried Chicken and Pizza Hut. The food in these places has been proven to be very unhealthy, and much of the advertising is targeted at children, thus ensuring that they constitute the bulk of the customers of these establishments. However, it is not only due to eating out, but also the type of diet many children have at home. A lot of food consumed is processed food, especially with regards to ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working hard.
The effects of this have been and will continue to be very serious. Firstly, there has been a large increase in health related diseases amongst children, especially diabetes. This debilitating illness means a child has to be injected with insulin for the rest of their life. Not only this, very overweight children often experience bullying from other children, which may affect their mental health. The negative stigma of being overweight may also affect self-esteem.
To sum up, it is evident that there are several causes of obesity amongst children, and a variety of negative effects. Society must ensure steps are taken to prevent this problem from deteriorating further."
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Here is a recent question that appeared in IELTS Writing Exam. In this article we will provide you the model answer to the question along with the important vocabulary and phrases in the passage. The question as quoted in the Writing...